It Is Down to Me

Generally I like to work on writing and on my revisions with Forward Motion's chat running in the background (and often the foreground, helping me procrastinate), but as the site is presently down for relocation, I'm stuck doing this all on my own. Great. No Problem. Except I've finally hit a spot in this revision where I could use a bit of help from a few fresh ears/eyes. Dialogue can be such a tricksy hobbit.

Snippet from Seventh Sense